Laharl Kujaku (Done)

Subject: Laharl Kujaku (Done) Wed Nov 11, 2009 8:00 pm

Basic Information:

Name: Laharl Kujaku
Nickname: Prince
Age: 12
Gender: Male
Clan: Kujaku

Appearance:

Hair Color: Dark Blue
Eye Color: Red
Distinguishing Features: Unusual hair, habit of wearing little clothing.
Common Outfit:
Laharl Kujaku (Done) 177022-laharl_large

Laharl Kujaku (Done) 177022-laharl_large

Professional Outfit:
None.

Specific Articles:
Golden armbands and an abnormally large red scarf.

Personality:

Overview:
Laharl is a genuinely well-meaning child, though he was brought up in a culture with wildly different morals than the one he presently resides in. He is bewildered by the 'good' acts of others, since he is foreign to them and uses various under-handed tricks in combat in order to win. Laharl typically avoids the company of females, hiding from sight when they are around since he finds it difficult to concentrate in the presence of sexy women, to the point that he is almost unable to fight.

Laharl rarely thinks about his former life, though he does have a deeply ingrained fear of death that he is not consciously aware of. Due to this, no matter how horrible his actions are, he will do everything in his power to avoid taking a life. Due to his father's death, he avoids eating food presented to him without first examining it closely and will plain out refuse to eat pretzels of any kind.

Likes:
- Royalty and others in high positions of feudal power
- Windy, rainy, or warm weather
- Nature
- Jewelry and precious metals
- New things

Dislikes:
- Over used phrases
- 'Goodness'
- Large breasts and sexy women
- Fake jewelry and metals
- Pretzels
- Death

Philosophy: Laharl examines the world in an almost purely negative way, seeing the flaws, errors, and other downfalls of the world and people. Little energy is put towards positive thought, and such thoughts are regarded as pointless or illogical. In contrast, he has a child-like curiosity in almost anything that is presented to him.
Nindo: Everything has a weakness, every weakness can be exploited.
Friends: None
Enemies/Rivals: None

Clan Details:

Name: Kujaku
Village: Star
Special Traits:

Glorious Peacock Chakra:
All Kujaku clan members are subject to training in their home village near an alien metorite that forcefully draws out the body's natural chakra reserves and then expands the body's capacity for chakra. The chakra takes on a purple color and resembles a flame in its movements and actions. The chakra is easily moved outside of the body and takes the natural form of tendril like formations from the base of the user's spine.

Typically these tendrils of chakra resemble peacock feathers, though other forms could exist and do exist depending on the user and their chakra's natural formation when moved out of the body in its tainted form. The chakra retains all the properties of chakra, excluding its ability to interact in its natural form with solid objects which natural chakra does not possess the ability to do.

All Kajaku clan members have a chakra increase of triple a normal ninja's chakra level for their age and rank. They also loss little chakra when using clan techniques. Inversely, a Kujaku clan member's chakra is of little use for internal jutsu, hence, they are unable to use any jutsu that does not have an external form as its primary function. (Ex. Most elemental jutsu create an external effect, creating something in the world, while many medical jutsu work within the body or another's body, and are impossible for a Kujaku clan member to use.)

They are also hindered in their use of Genjutsu, any chakra directed out of their body is visible when attempting to use Genjutsu. This creates a problem, since most Genjutsu users find it a hindrance that they cannot use their techniques unseen. The Genjutsu still functions, however, once it contacts an opponent.

In a similar manner, all chakra that a clan member uses in jutsu is visible, all jutsu glow with a purple colored aura, or are purple. This doesn't affect the jutsu's effect, just its coloration, a purple fireball would still be as potentially destructive as a normal fireball. Earth, plants, or other non-organic substances that are currently housing a clan member's chakra glow purple, making it difficult to conceal and hide trap jutsu.

Short Life:
All Kujaku clan members, due to their bodies unnatural chakra expansion and alteration, have a shortened life span. They typically do not live past their thirties, a rare person might live into their fifties if they halted their training and exposure to the metorite. Each use of jutsu with the tainted chakra speeds this along, making active ninja extremely unlikely to live into their thirties, often dying in their twenties.

Chakra Marks:
Due to exposure to the alien metorite, various purple markings appear on the flesh like tattoos and reveals their unnatural nature. The marks are readily identifiable by Hyuuga or others able to sense chakra from a distance, they radiate with chakra, though this does not allow for the average ninja to detect it. These marks appear much more frequently and visibly on ninja who use their clan jutsu more often or are physically weak.

These marks appear to have a damaging effect on the ninja's body, disabling the use of Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, or Weaponry techniques since the body is incapable of making the neccessary movements needed in the majority of their jutsu.

Kekkei Genkai: None
Secret Clan Jutsu: Not Listed here.

Rank Information:

Rank: Genin
Village: Hidden Grass, Aoigakure
Squad: None

Special Information:

Strengths:
- Fluid movements
- Identification of metals/jewels
- Slightly higher intellect than most
- Stealth and thievery

Weaknesses:
- Excessive pride
- Prone to violence
- Inability to use some emotions
- Inability to think under heavy pressure

Elemental Affinities: Suiton
Special Characteristics:

Vile Goodness:
Laharl, raised in a culture were vile acts are considered viable, does not feel guilt or remorse for any actions he performs, excluding actions regarded as 'good'. He cannot be affected, harmfully, by jutsu that rely on guilt, horrific images, etc. unless these jutsu use images of 'goodness'. If Laharl is guilty of a 'good' act, jutsu that use guilt are incredibly effective when using that guilt.

Thieving Artist:
Laharl is especially skilled in stealing objects. He is able to disguise attempts to take something off a person with simple gestures, movements, or even physical attacks. He can steal things from pockets that are not locked with a zipper and can take unattended objects and hide them on his person incredibly easily.

Glorious Peacock Chakra:
All Kujaku clan members are subject to training in their home village near an alien metorite that forcefully draws out the body's natural chakra reserves and then expands the body's capacity for chakra. The chakra takes on a purple color and resembles a flame in its movements and actions. The chakra is easily moved outside of the body and takes the natural form of tendril like formations from the base of the user's spine.

Typically these tendrils of chakra resemble peacock feathers, though other forms could exist and do exist depending on the user and their chakra's natural formation when moved out of the body in its tainted form. The chakra retains all the properties of chakra, excluding its ability to interact in its natural form with solid objects which natural chakra does not possess the ability to do.

All Kajaku clan members have a chakra increase of triple a normal ninja's chakra level for their age and rank. They also loss little chakra when using clan techniques. Inversely, a Kujaku clan member's chakra is of little use for internal jutsu, hence, they are unable to use any jutsu that does not have an external form as its primary function. (Ex. Most elemental jutsu create an external effect, creating something in the world, while many medical jutsu work within the body or another's body, and are impossible for a Kujaku clan member to use.)

They are also hindered in their use of Genjutsu, any chakra directed out of their body is visible when attempting to use Genjutsu. This creates a problem, since most Genjutsu users find it a hindrance that they cannot use their techniques unseen. The Genjutsu still functions, however, once it contacts an opponent.

In a similar manner, all chakra that a clan member uses in jutsu is visible, all jutsu glow with a purple colored aura, or are purple. This doesn't affect the jutsu's effect, just its coloration, a purple fireball would still be as potentially destructive as a normal fireball. Earth, plants, or other non-organic substances that are currently housing a clan member's chakra glow purple, making it difficult to conceal and hide trap jutsu.

Short Life:
All Kujaku clan members, due to their bodies unnatural chakra expansion and alteration, have a shortened life span. They typically do not live past their thirties, a rare person might live into their fifties if they halted their training and exposure to the metorite. Each use of jutsu with the tainted chakra speeds this along, making active ninja extremely unlikely to live into their thirties, often dying in their twenties.

Chakra Marks:
Due to exposure to the alien metorite, various purple markings appear on the flesh like tattoos and reveals their unnatural nature. The marks are readily identifiable by Hyuuga or others able to sense chakra from a distance, they radiate with chakra, though this does not allow for the average ninja to detect it. These marks appear much more frequently and visibly on ninja who use their clan jutsu more often or are physically weak.

These marks appear to have a damaging effect on the ninja's body, disabling the use of Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, or Weaponry techniques since the body is incapable of making the neccessary movements needed in the majority of their jutsu.

Specialties: Ninjutsu / ~~Fuuinjutsu~~

Subject: Re: Laharl Kujaku (Done) Wed Nov 11, 2009 8:01 pm

Jutsu

Basic Techniques:

Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu lets the user quickly switch places with another nearby object, such as a plant (normally a section of a log), an animal, or even another person within reach, leaving the opponent open to a counter-attack. Explosive tags can be attached to the replacement for an added surprise. Fundamentally, all ninja know this technique.

Name: Henge no Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu allows the user to assume the appearance of another person, animal, or object. This is one of the basic jutsu taught at the Konoha Ninja Academy. Fundamentally, all ninja know this jutsu. The transformation jutsu is considered to be among the more difficult E-ranked techniques, since it requires constant emission of chakra while mentally maintaining the form. On top of that, the user would be, most likely, interacting with the environment. This puts much mental strain on the inexperienced ninja.

Name: Bunshin no Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This technique creates intangible copies of the user. The clones are simply illusions and will dissipate when they come into contact with something. The illusions can be seen through by the Byakugan and the Sharingan. A person with normal eyes can also distinguish the clones from the original, since the clones will not disrupt the area around themselves with their movement (won't kick up dust, crush grass, etc.).

Name: Nawanuke no Jutsu
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: A basic jutsu taught at the Konoha Ninja Academy, this jutsu allows a ninja to free themselves if they have been tied up.

Name: Genjutsu Kai
Rank: E-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.

Name: Shunshin no Jutsu
Rank: D-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short to long distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. A puff of smoke is occasionally used to disguise the user's movements. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily boost the user's reflexes. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance between the user and their intended destination.

Kujaku Clan Techniques:

Name: Peacock Art, Chakra Release
Rank: D
Type: None
Element: None
Description: A clan member's purple chakra is pushed out of the body and takes a visible form. The form it takes is different for each user, though it is commonly a peacock tail with multiple feathers. Feathers are added according to rank, starting off with three feathers at D Rank, and increasing by two feather per rank, with a maximum of eleven feathers. If the chakra takes a form that is not feathers, then replace all instances of 'feather' with the appropriate word in all clan jutsu including this jutsu.

Name: Peacock Art, Meditative Stance
Rank: D
Type: None
Element: None
Description: Using a form of meditation used to gain their initial powers, a clan member can close their eyes, sit down, and relax their bodies in order to increase chakra output to optimal levels. All clan jutsu are reduced to a chakra cost one rank lower than their true rank, but this jutsu cannot reduce the highest rank of jutsu available (Ex.A Genin cannot reduce C Rank jutsu costs to D Rank until they are Chunnin.) While in this stance, the user is in a state of unconsciousness and it takes one post to return to normal, in which the user cannot be under immediate threat. The stance cannot be exited, for example, when someone threatens to deal bodily harm to the user in their post, they would take the damage and then exit their stance.

Name: Peacock Art, Chakra Strings
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description: A clan member creates strings of chakra from their hands, of the typical purple color, that are able to be used as normal string, typically to tie and bind an opponent. The strings are immune to the standard 'Rope Escape' jutsu and are unable to be cut or damage by standard ninja weaponry, nor can they be burst with physical strength. The strings will break at the command of a clan member, and only at the command of a clan member. The strings take a fair amount of time to properly wrap around an opponent, so they cannot be used on an active and conscious opponent unless they are willing.

Name: Peacock Art, Chakra Attack
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description: A clan member directs their chakra to attack an opponent (after using Peacock Art, Chakra Release), extending out to attack a target(s) in whatever attack is directed and is naturally possible (ex. the typical peacock feathers would be used to slam, slap, or slash at opponents but could not be used to bite since they lack a mouth, or claw since they lack talons.) Each feather can extend out 5ft. from the user at D Rank, with 5ft. added per rank beyond that, maxing at 25ft. The chakra attacks at high speed, making it virtually impossible to dodge within 2ft of the user at D Rank, with 1ft added per rank, maxing at 6ft. Attacks beyond this range are still fast, but are able to be dodged by a nimble opponent.

The chakra strikes with the potential strength of a tree trunk being swung (though at lower ranks the attacks made are much less, the potential strength is achieved only at A Rank or higher, lower ranks strike with the force would typically associates with solid chakra, strong enough to hurt and move but not strong enough to inflict harm on metals.), making it capable of knocking back opponents and destroying environmental hindrances with ease. Direct attacks against the chakra sever the feather(s) attacked, though they can be recreated with another use of Peacock Art, Chakra Release.

Name: Peacock Art, Chakra Defense
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description: A clan member directs their chakra to defend themselves and solidify into a harder and more durable form (this jutsu can only be used after Peacock Art, Chakra Release.) The chakra feathers change hardness so they are able to block attacks without being broken or destroyed, acting as wholely solid objects. The defensive power is able to negate attacks that are one rank lower than the user, attacks at the same rank or higher are only partially hindered by the defense and continue on towards the target.

Name: Peacock Art, Chakra Wings
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description: A clan member changes the form of their typical chakra feathers into wings that enable flight. The wings are differing in appearance according to the user, but they all are able to be used for flight, and all must be around the same size as the user or larger. If directly attacked by jutsu, the wings 'break' and return to the user's body.

Name: Peacock Art, Water Burst
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: A Kujaku clan member extends a number of their chakra feathers out towards an opponent and then causes the tip to shift into water and then burst out in sharp ‘v’ shaped water formations that cut an opponent who is within 5ft of the burst. This attack usually is used when the opponent dodges a Kujaku attack.

Name: Peacock Art, Octopus Tendrils
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: A Kujaku technique that causes the feathers created through Peacock Art, Chakra Release, to change shape and form, growing into octopus tentacles rather than feathers. Each feather gains +5ft in range of attack and +1ft to its quick attack range. This jutsu lasts until reversed or the feather is destroyed.

Suiton Techniques:

Name: Water Drawing Palm
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Suiton
Description: This jutsu allows the user to gather water from the environment around him, like from the air, soil, etc. However, if in dry lands, this jutsu is useless. When used by Laharl, an open hand is usually presented and the water forms there.

Name: Water Sphere
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Suiton
Description: A jutsu similar to Water Bullet, except that the ball is formed around an empty hand and then thrown at an opponent. The water ball, though smaller than a water bullet, is more concentrated and can inflict more damage on targets it hits.

Name: Mizu Bunshin no Jutsu - Water Clone Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Suiton
Description: Mizu Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that utilizes water to create a Bunshin clone. Unlike a normal Bunshin, the Mizu Bunshin has the ability to interact more with the environment due to it having physical substance. This allows the clone to carry out limited attacks on its target. The range of the clone is limited however; it can not travel very far from the original body. If the Mizu Bunshin is injured, the clone will usually revert back into its natural water state.

Name: Mystic Water Art
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Suiton
Description: The user creates a simple object out of solid water by submerging their hand in it and then pulling the hand out with the desired object. The object must be created using the volume of water submerged, and a sufficient amount of water must exist to form it. The object must be unable to be used as a weapon directly (ex. you could not create a sword, but you could create a chair) and the created objects holds it form only as long as contact is maintained.

Name: Sphere Rain, Minor
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: The user creates a concentrated sphere in water in their hand and then throws it up into the air where it then bursts into a shower of raindrops. These rain drops can form into clumps similar to a Water Bullet and then fall down on an opponent. Dodging the attack is made difficult by the fact that the raindrops form into spheres of water only when within a few feet of the opponent. Each Water Bullet is much smaller than a normal bullet, but the quantity makes it equally as powerful.

Name: Skipping Wave
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: A jutsu that is attached to another Suiton jutsu, Skipping Wave enables another Suiton technique that, if dodged, to strike an object and then send out waves of water that will typically hit the opponent who dodged the initial attack. The waves burst out 5ft from the impact, +5ft per rank above C Rank of the jutsu this jutsu is attached to.

Name: Water Beam
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: The user raises one of their hands and splits their fingers, creating a ‘V’ with their hand. The hand is then tipped downwards, upwards, or in whatever direction a target is, and forms a jet of water from between the fingers that strikes the target.

Name: Water Breathing Jutsu
Rank: C (A)
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water (None)
Description: A common jutsu used by ninja, though water ninja learn it much earlier and with greater ease than other ninja. Water ninja learn this jutsu at Genin or C-Rank, while others learn it at Jounin or A-Rank. Water ninja treat this as a Water Style Jutsu, while others treat it as non-elemental.

This jutsu allows a ninja to use chakra to extract oxygen from water and to block too much water from entering the lungs by forming a barrier around the bodily openings (nose, mouth, skin pores, etc.) This jutsu negates certain water jutsu that rely on suffocation to kill.

Name: Lightning Disrupting Swirl
Rank: C-B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: The user creates a small bead of water in an area within eye sight of the user that swirls within itself. The bead of water is highly concentrated and when it contacts a Raiton technique, it breaks its form and disrupts it (by drawing the lightning, due to water‘s conductivity), causing it to fizz out and explode in a 5ft explosion rather than whatever other effect was intended. The Raiton technique must touch the formed bead, but is not drawn to it in any way. If a B Rank amount of chakra is used, up to five beads may be created simultaneously.

Name: Flame Disrupting Swirl
Rank: C-B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: The user places out their palm, coating it in a film of water that is used to strike against, and negate, a Katon technique. The film constantly moves and swirls about like live water. The film of water negates C and B Rank Katon jutsu, reducing an Endan into an extinguished spark for example. If a B Rank amount of chakra is used, and accompanied by a shove in the direction against the jutsu, A Rank jutsu can be negated.

Name: Ocean Foam
Rank: C-A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Suiton
Description: The user causes an opponent's Suiton technique to become watery foam, similar to the foam created by the ocean, rather than harmful water when it nears the user. The amount of chakra required to halt a jutsu is equal to the letter below the rank of the jutsu being negated through this effect.

Name: Water Claws Jutsu
Rank: C-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Water
Description: A water ninja can form claws made of solid water around their fingernails, or from the knuckles if desired. The claws can pierce skin and muscle at C, bones and soft metals at B, most non-specialized metals at A, and can pierce through any combination of the previous at S Rank (as in, it could go straight through metal and flesh at S Rank.)

Name: Hahonryuu - Destruction Torrent
Rank: C-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Suiton
Description: Suiton • Hahonryuu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Water Element. To use this technique Laharl will generate water to use against his opponent. Depending on the amount of chakra put into the technique is how much water will be generated.

Name: Twisting Passage of Hellish Nightmares
Rank: C-S
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Wind or Water
Description: A ninja forms a whirlpool or tornado, depending on which is desired, that is filled with solidified water (or wind) in the form of sharp talons or teeth. Ninja trapped in the tornado or whirlpool are shredded to pieces with the sharp points, being covered in light cuts at C Rank, moderate cuts at B Rank, Heavy cuts at A Rank, and possible lethality at S Rank.

A ninja can hold this jutsu for a number of posts depending on the rank used, and the ninja’s rank. A C Rank ninja can hold C for 1 post, a B Rank ninja can hold C for 2 posts, B for 1, an A Rank ninja can hold C for 3 posts, B for 2 posts, A for 1 post, and an S Rank ninja can hold C for 5 posts, B for 3 posts, A for 3 posts, and S for 1 post. Ninja who have had this jutsu from C-S rank (as in Genin to Jounin) are able to hold their S Rank jutsu for 3 posts, due to their familiarity with the jutsu.

Subject: Re: Laharl Kujaku (Done) Wed Nov 11, 2009 8:01 pm

Martial Styles:

None.

Weaponry:

Standard Weaponry:
- 100 Senbon
- 15ft of Wire
- Handheld Mirror
- Headband

Name: Silver Coin
Quantity: x25
Rank: E
Physical Description: A small silver coin that easily catches available light, focusing it into itself and making it appear much more valuable than it actually is.
Natural Abilities: The coins are designed to capture light and focus it on itself, making it very hard to ignore due to the shine. Those who stare at the coin when exposed to full and direct sunlight risk temporary blindness (lasts for 1 post after eyes are removed from coin.) Otherwise, it is simply a coin that Laharl uses to juggle when bored.
Powered Abilities: None
History: A standard silver coin made of a lustrous metal that was used to bribe Laharl into learning various techniques during his training as a ninja.

History:

Pre-Academy Arc:

Laharl, born into a kingdom beneath the earth, was a prince, child of the present king whose title represented his immense power, The Overlord. The culture in his homeland was such that thievery, hatred, murder, and other acts that one would deem horrible in the normal world were legal and acceptable. He grew up under the shadow of his father for numerous years until he eventually choked on a black pretzel and died.

Shortly afterwards, his mother died, her life claimed by a mental illness that lead her to believe that the only way to save her son was to kill herself. She claimed that a curse was laid on her son, but the concept of 'jutsu' in the land was unheard of so such claims were disbelieved and replaced with insanity as the cause.

Laharl was removed from his homeland after this, deemed a hindrance to the land because he was too young to rule and he would only follow his parents footsteps and either die inconveniently or be driven insane. He was blindfolded with his own scarf and then taken away to the surface where he was left in a grassy field for whatever fate had in store for him.

Academy Student Arc:

After being left on his own, Laharl, already ten years old, made his own way through the hunting of animals and using grass for bedding. He lived in the wild for some time, until he was discovered by a village ninja returning from a mission. The man, shinobi suit on and bandages covering his face except for two piercing red eyes and flowing white hair, looked at Laharl.

Meeting the strangers red eyes with his own, they stood for a brief moment before the man bent down on his knee and inquired about the child's life, home, and living. Laharl was reluctant to answer these questions until he noted a silver coin fall out of the man's pocket. He greedily snatched it up, examining its luster and the man immediately caught on, bribing information out of Laharl for an hour or so.

Eventually, he decided he would take the child home with him and lifted Laharl up onto his shoulders and carried him off into town and to his home. There Laharl was introduced to a shard of what appeared to be a strangely colored rock. The man explained that this was a fragment of a mystical meteorite he had stolen from Star village on a previous mission, and that it had great power.

Laharl was taught the jutsu of the ninja world, being bribed with silver coins in order to effectively learn and was also exposed to the meteorite for training. The shinobi, unknown to Laharl, was supposed to locate a child and determine the exact effects of the meteorite for his mission. Laharl was a perfect subject and had been happened upon within an hour of searching.

Genin Arc:

As Laharl matured and became further able to use his new abilities, being documented by the shinobi who took him in, he began to wander off on his own and was registered as a Grass Village shinobi. He presently spends most of his time snatching unattended coins from purses and laying out on the grass and looking at whatever loot he managed to obtain.

Subject: Re: Laharl Kujaku (Done) Wed Nov 11, 2009 8:25 pm

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Age : 35 Posts : 58 Location : UK. Join date : 2009-10-31

Haha, you want to know something funny, Hage? I got to the end of your jutsu section and saw Water Claws and Twisting Passage, then immediately started typing about taking these from another site without permission. Good thing I realised it was you before I posted, huh?

--> Probably could use a little more under personality overview.

--> The Kujaku techniques that state "at X rank, the tech is Y more effective" could do with variable ranks (i.e. C-A(. So we can tell how strong they'll get.

--> You mention the chakra hitting with the strength of a tree trunk being swung. That seems a little extreme for a technique available at D-rank. I know you've imposed range limitations per rank, but please could you add power limitations per rank too.

--> Earth Disrupting Swirl - logically, this technique makes sense. But according to laws of chakra elements in Naruto, Doton techniques generally resist Suiton. You need to make alterations here to accommodate that 'fact'.

Subject: Re: Laharl Kujaku (Done) Fri Nov 13, 2009 5:45 pm

~Fox~ wrote:: Haha, you want to know something funny, Hage? I got to the end of your jutsu section and saw Water Claws and Twisting Passage, then immediately started typing about taking these from another site without permission. Good thing I realised it was you before I posted, huh?

I've moved all of the techniques that belonged to me over to this site, but they still say Owner: Hageshii Ame on them, I just removed it because I really don't think people need to know I own my techniques, seems redundant Razz

New site, it's fine, though I probably would've added your quote to my list somewhere Smile

~Fox~ wrote:: --> Probably could use a little more under personality overview.

Fair enough.

~Fox~ wrote:: --> The Kujaku techniques that state "at X rank, the tech is Y more effective" could do with variable ranks (i.e. C-A(. So we can tell how strong they'll get.

The techniques were left without a variable rank because that implies an increased use of chakra due to an increased rank and then I'd have to add a clause about the different ranks costing the same. The change in strength represents a change in skill on the user's part, not the jutsu's, so I left them as one rank.

~Fox~ wrote:: --> You mention the chakra hitting with the strength of a tree trunk being swung. That seems a little extreme for a technique available at D-rank. I know you've imposed range limitations per rank, but please could you add power limitations per rank too.

Fixed.

~Fox~ wrote:: --> Earth Disrupting Swirl - logically, this technique makes sense. But according to laws of chakra elements in Naruto, Doton techniques generally resist Suiton. You need to make alterations here to accommodate that 'fact'.

I've removed the technique and added it into my personal storage of justu on Microsoft Word as a B Rank technique. It's being stored with Air Disrupting Swirl, so it'll have some company while it hangs out in limbo for a little while.

Age : 35 Posts : 58 Location : UK. Join date : 2009-10-31

Quote :: The techniques were left without a variable rank because that implies an increased use of chakra due to an increased rank and then I'd have to add a clause about the different ranks costing the same. The change in strength represents a change in skill on the user's part, not the jutsu's, so I left them as one rank.

M'kay.

Quote :: I've removed the technique and added it into my personal storage of justu on Microsoft Word as a B Rank technique. It's being stored with Air Disrupting Swirl, so it'll have some company while it hangs out in limbo for a little while.

Okay, I'll keep my eye out for it when you hit Chuunin.

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